Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university to or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages?

Traditionally individuals have been starting their education after
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their schooling but in
this
day and age, pupils prefer to continue their
further
education after exploring places in which they are interested. My firm conviction is that
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students should take a break from their studies and get some experience in their fields for earning and support their families. Its merits are more overwhelming than
demerits
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. To commence with,after a long break in
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it
become
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hurdle
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for students to continue their studies. They spent
much
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time with other activities like travelling and
doinh
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doing
jobs and start earning
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fulfill
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their dreams . After
become
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independen
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independent
they think
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enough for them to continue their academic field
further
in future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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