The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories
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The given bar chart illustrates the export earnings of one country between 2015 and 2016
while
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the table provides information about the changes in their value. From an
overall
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perspective, it can be seen that petroleum products had the highest rate
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textiles experienced the biggest increase. And all of the graphs climbed except the hems and jewellery one. To delve deeper into the data, petroleum exports rose slightly by exactly 3% to reach just below 65
billion
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dollars. Engineering goods
also
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had high figures and its goods increased by 8,5% to over 80
billion
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dollars in 2016. Jems and jewellery is the sole figure which dropped by 5,18% and accounted for roughly 40
billion
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in the second year. Agricultural products remained relatively the same with a slight increase below 1%
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textiles figures saw an upward trend with more than 15% to even exceed 30
billion
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dollars in earnings.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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