The graph below presents the employment patterns in the usa between 1930 and 2010

The graph below presents the employment patterns in the usa between 1930 and 2010
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The line graph describes the hiring rates in different fields
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as Industrial, Technical, sales and office, farming, fishing and foresting and other services among the labour force in the USA within 1930 and 2010.
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, in the
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of farming, fishing and foresting recruitment was on the higher side, which gradually decreased after 1970.
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with regard to the other, streams there is a struggle seen to raise the rate of enrollment. In 1930, the workmen force was around 75 per cent in farming, fishing and foresting which was the highest when compared to the other working field in America, in the year 1940 to 1970 there was a slight decline of around 4 to 5 per cent each year,
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a rapid decrease was seen in 1980 till 2010 that reached to around 2%.
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, the workforce the sales and offices there was a fluctuating intake in 1930 at around 10% till 1990 which slowly increased to 20% for the next 20 years,
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in the
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Industrial
sector there was a zero service rate till 1960, which rapidly increased to around 35% in 2010 same was seen in the field of Technology had a slow start in 1930 that reached almost 30% in 2010. Compared with other services from 1930 to 1950 ups and downs are seen
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a constant growth is been followed
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