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Through out history, it is found that male leaders had led world towards violence and conflicts. The world would be governed better and peacefully if female were leaders. what is your opinion?

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Introduction
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the
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history , more over both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 are ruled our nations very well. In
this
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essays
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, we will
dicuss
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discuss
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phenomenon
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.
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In ancient
time
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times
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 leaders are more muscular and
there
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their
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action
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actions
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 are more aggressive. Eg.
Leader
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he
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is
most
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a most
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leader
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 because he
have
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ethics
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the ethics
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 to rule the nation .if someone
is defeat
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 him he turns to be more
dangers
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 and
protect
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 the nation like a lion.
Body paragraph 2
In
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 think,
the
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male leaders are more
stranger
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strangers
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 and
ruling
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 capability is relatively high compared
the
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openent
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opponent
.
The
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They
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took decision very fast and
acting
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acted
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 fast .
This
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 type of
behavoiur
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behaviour
which
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leads to some unwanted
problem
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problems
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between
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 the country. But
certain
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 decision is necessary to protect the nation.
Body paragraph 3
In
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other
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the other
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 hand , female
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leader
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leaders
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not
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are not
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 so weaker
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then
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than
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male
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males
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. The
problem solving
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 skill is relatively more and they think about
future
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the future
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 before doing
the
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new things. Even though
decision
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 mak
Conclusion
My conclusion in both
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leader
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leaders
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are
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possibly led the world towards violence , conflicts and
peacefully
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peace
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. It could be the situation that belongs
too
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to
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.if suppose world
leader
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are
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 doing their need professionally and there no mor3 conflicts can happen future . If
who ever
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whoever
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 ruled the country.

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