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The dangers and complexities of modern world have made mobile phone an absolute neccessity forchildren. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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The mobile
phone
 has useful in our everyday
life
. And
children
 must have phones for their protection in danger. I will discuss my opinion of why agree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
,
children
 must have a
phone
 for their daily activities so they can use their school and connect to their family and friends. Mobile
phone
 is important to monitor our
children
 where they are.
For instance
, mobile phones have the modern capability to detect locations via GPS.
Life
 of our
children
 is the most concern in our country there is a lot of kidnapping happening and without the GPS of the mobile we can not trace the location or maybe they can ask for help true gadget.
That is
 why phones are important to our
kids
.
Secondly
, owning a
phone
 for our
kids
 is important to them and to parents so they can monitor and take care of their
children
.
Although
, there is a disadvantage to having a
phone
 for
kids
 it affects daily
life
 and their health but we need to guide them and teach them how to use it properly. Because without communication with our ,
kids
 it will be difficult to monitor where they are. In my ,opinion
children
 must have a
phone
 to them so it can easy to contact them and they can use it
also
 for their daily activities.
To conclude
, mobile
phone
 is making an easy way to communicate with our
children
 even though there are some advantages to them but, we need to give them to protect them from any danger to their
life
.
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