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Some people think that parents should treat children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this

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It is believed by some folks that younger ones should be taught how to be good members of
Society
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 by their guardians and to some it should be learnt in
school
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.
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children
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 spend most of their
time
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 in
school
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.
however
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, parents should
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 teach their
children
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 how to be better individuals in
society
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. I will expatiate more in
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 essay with relevant examples and a logical conclusion.
To begin
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, some individuals support the idea that
children
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 to be taught how to be a good
member
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 of the community because learning starts from home, any lessons Instill in the child as he grows help in his behaviour and how he relates with others. To illustrate, my cousin is very active and obedient in their community
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 what has been told and taught how to do by his mother which is very helpful up to
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 moment, everyone in
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 respects and adores him because of his good attitude in
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.
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, it is very important for parents to teach
children
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 how to be better people in
society
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.
On the other hand
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, to some people,
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 should be learnt in
school
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due to
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 the fact that most
children
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 spend most of their
time
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 in
school
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 and when getting home they have no
time
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 to listen to their parents anymore.
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, my neighbour's daughter leaves home for
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 as early as 6am and comes back at 6pm. So it is noticed that
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 boy can only have the
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 to acquire any knowledge that will be of help to him from
school
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.
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, the
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also
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 plays a very paramount part in assisting
children
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 how to be the best members of
society
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.
To conclude
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, in my opinion, both schools and guardians have the right in teaching the younger ones how to be better individuals in
society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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