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Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Health
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 is the most important factor in
people
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's lives. Many believe that exercising is the key to
health
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,
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 others think a balanced
diet
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 is the key. In my opinion,
exercise
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 and a healthy
diet
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 are important factors.
This
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 essay will discuss both sides. On the one hand, nowadays
people
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 are spending more time at the gym. Believing that exercising is the main key to a healthy lifestyle. First, a recent study showed that
exercise
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 helps to maintain proper
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health
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 and reduces the risk of serious illness.
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, doing cardio,
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 helps to reduce blood pressure and stabilize blood sugar.
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people
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 who work out regularly tend to be much happier,
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and smarter
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, and maintain good sleeping habits.
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working out improves everyone's mental
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.
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 the brain’s hormones,
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this
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apply
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has a major effect on reducing stress,
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 eliminating depression, suicidal thoughts, and anxiety.
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, some
people
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 adopt a proper
diet
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 plan as a key factor. Many studies have shown that a consistent
diet
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 improves an individual's well-being. Consuming a higher quality of food is like investing in the whole body.
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, unhealthy food may destroy the body and increase the risk of serious diseases. In conclusion, it is obvious that
exercise
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,
as well as
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 a balanced
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diet
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 are both key elements to a healthy and vibrant life. In my ,opinion,
people
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 should balance between
diet
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 and physical fitness. Both are important factors in maintaining optimum
health
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. In fact, doing thirty per cent of
exercise
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 and seventy per cent of a good
diet
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 plan will sustain a good and healthy lifestyle.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Metabolism
  • Chronic diseases
  • Immune system
  • Mental well-being
  • Nutrients
  • Malnutrition
  • Obesity
  • Type 2 diabetes
  • Circulation
  • Nutrient distribution
  • Preventive health
  • Energy levels
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
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