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The graphs below show the number of hours people spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the number of hours people spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are three different graphs which illustrate how
much
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 hours individuals spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016. On top of that, graphs
demostrate
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demonstrate
 % of businesses which have
socia
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social
 media
contribution
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contributions
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throught
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through
throughout
 mentioned years.
To sum
up
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 all facts, small and medium types had
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approximately
a
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apply
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half of
presence
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the presence
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 in 2016. Large businesses always had a significant percentage of presence in all years, except
2015
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in 2015
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. First of all,
small
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 type had around 30% from 2012-2015.
However
,in the next year, it had a near half of
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the percentages
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percentages
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percentage
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.
In addition
 to it, the second type of
businesses
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business
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 had
low
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a low
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 % only in 2012 and 2015, respectively.
Last
 but not least, the large one had low numbers only in 2015.
Then
, in 2016, there was a
dramatical
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 majority of presence, in social media,
near
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 80%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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