Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
day and age, our means of
communication
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this
day and age, our means of
communication
has
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changed significantly because of
electronical
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electronic
inventions
such
as email and messaging.
People
have various opinions with regard to the
question
of whether communicating electronically has detrimental effects on
people
's social
lives
or vice versa. Personally, I disagree with
this
statement
because I believe that modern
communications
benefit
people
's socializing. It is true that modern technology has reduced the
time
people
spend meeting.
However
, it can be
positive
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a positive
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aspect as it makes
communication
become easier than ever.
For instance
, they can start
conversation
by a
click
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on their phone.
Moreover
, modern
communication
tools help us to keep in touch with our distant
relationships
.
Therefore
, geographical distances are no longer
problem
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a problem
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to maintain
relationships
. At the same
time
, I do not believe modern technologies should be responsible for
poor
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the poor
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quality of our social
lives
.
This
is because
,
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individuals can have bad situations with each other in
face to
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face-to-face
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face
conversation
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conversations
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. Nowadays,
the
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group of
people
go to
cafe
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cafes
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or
restaurant
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restaurants
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for
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exchange their ideas but
instead
of spending
time
together
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,together
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they tend to focus more on the screens of their mobile phones. Modern
communications
shouldn't be blamed for unhealthy
relationships
. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with
statement
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in
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the
question
because modern
communications
bring many advantages to improve a relationship and it is not a reason for
people
's unhealthy social life.has changed significantly because of
electronical
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electronic
inventions
such
as email and messaging.
People
have various opinions with regard to the
question
of whether communicating electronically has detrimental effects on
people
's social
lives
or vice versa. Personally, I disagree with
this
statement
because I believe that modern
communications
benefit
people
's socializing. It is true that modern technology has reduced the
time
people
spend meeting.
However
, it can be
positive
Correct article usage
a positive
show examples
aspect as it makes
communication
become easier than ever.
For instance
, they can start
conversation
by a
click
Replace the word
clicking
show examples
on their phone.
Moreover
, modern
communication
tools help us to keep in touch with our distant
relationships
.
Therefore
, geographical distances are no longer
problem
Add an article
a problem
show examples
to maintain
relationships
. At the same
time
, I do not believe modern technologies should be responsible for
poor
Add an article
the poor
show examples
quality of our social
lives
.
This
is because
,
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apply
show examples
individuals can have bad situations with each other in
face to
Add a hyphen
face-to-face
show examples
face
conversation
Fix the agreement mistake
conversations
show examples
. Nowadays,
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
group of
people
go to
cafe
Fix the agreement mistake
cafes
show examples
or
restaurant
Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
show examples
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
exchange their ideas but
instead
of spending
time
together
Add a comma
,together
show examples
they tend to focus more on the screens of their mobile phones. Modern
communications
shouldn't be blamed for unhealthy
relationships
. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with
statement
Add an article
the statement
show examples
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
the
question
because modern
communications
bring many advantages to improve a relationship and it is not a reason for
people
's unhealthy social life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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