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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? ________________________________________

#people #job #career #life #change #jobs #________________________________________
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There is an army of
people
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 who believes that individuals who have early career plans and stick at it tend to have more satisfying career lives than one
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whom change their
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 on a daily basis. As far as
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 argument goes, I am not in favour of the aforementioned stance for the following reasons. One of the most pivotal contentions opposed to my idea maintains that taking
jobs
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 into early consideration enables
people
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 to know which
jobs
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 will be suitable for them. Indeed, what they claim is plausible. Various theories have been submitted to prompt researchers to acknowledge that early deliberations will offer
people
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 insights into their enthusiasts, which can help them choose the right paths.
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, job satisfaction depends on various factors
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 salary, working conditions, promoting opportunities, working environment… They can affect workers’ decisions of continuing their
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 or not.
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, my brother started working as a software developer in a well-known company, which necessitated him working 12 hours per day, in an extreme environment. He started burning out after the first few months, finding that he did not lend himself to undertaking that job and decided to become an artist
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. Given his wise choice, not only did he have a huge turnover coming from his masterpieces but he was
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 capable of chasing his dream of becoming a professional artist.
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, those defenders of
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 argument may insist that following early plans helps
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 with steering clear of career risks. They have their own point in stating
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that.
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, by starting their own businesses can
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 have an opportunity of running their own corporations and
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earn large
 incomes, which
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 change their lives.
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, if my uncle had not given up his job and had not established his own business, he would not have become a millionaire.
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, his company soon became an international company and had thousands of subsidiaries worldwide. In conclusion, changing
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provides
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 workers with more choices to follow their dreams or walk on their own paths.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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