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The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The given graph illustrates how many
people
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 visited a museum during two seasons:
summer
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 and winter in 2003 in the United Kingdom. In general, it could be highlighted that
people
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 entered
this
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 museum in
summer
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 more often than did
it
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apply
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during the winter season. Another interesting point is that
people
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 who visited
this
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 place did
in
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it in
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 the afternoon mostly. Looking at the details, as regards
summer
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 visitors, it could be clearly seen that the number of
people
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 experienced a gradual increase from opening hours to 12 o'clock, After that, it dropped significantly from 1500 visitors to 800, and
then
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 fell. If we look at the winter period, what stands out from the graph is that the number of
people
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 who visited the museum was very small compared to the
summer
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. It started from 500 visitors in opening hours, reached a peak at 600 and
then
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 dropped sharply to 0 in 14.00. For the
last
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 three hours of working nobody visited
this
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 place of interest.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, summer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Peak season
  • Off-peak season
  • Visitor influx
  • Steady increase
  • Significant drop
  • Month-on-month comparison
  • Seasonal variation
  • Cultural attraction
  • Tourism trends
  • Historical data
  • Visitor demographics
  • Analytical observation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Statistical evidence
  • Conclusive summary
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