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Communication technology has changed significantly in last decade. Discuss the positives and negatives of this change.

There are many changes observed in
communication
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 in the
last
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 decade.
Such
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 changes created certain positive
as well as
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 negative effects on our
life
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.
This
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positive
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the positive
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 and negative side of
communication
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 in detail.
Firstly
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,
communication
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 today plays a huge role in many sectors to bring happiness to our
life
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.
Person
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A person
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 can convey messages fast and easy way to
respective
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the respective
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 person.
Nation
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A nation
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 can secure its borders and can provide
fundamental
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a fundamental
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 platform
to
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for
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 companies to achieve their goals by building
strong
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a strong
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communication
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network
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networks
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.
For instance
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, In
India
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,India
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 only, 1 billion people are connected through mobile technology which helps them to save
their
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apply
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valuable time in message duration.
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,
communication
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 has changed our
life
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 significantly and we have accepted
this
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 technology as a part of our
life
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. On the other side,
communication
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 could be used for negative
purpose
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purposes
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 as well. Many financial, government and other important
website
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websites
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 can be hacked using
communication
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medium
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mediums
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.
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, recently, one unknown hacker hacked millions of bank account data of one of the top most
bank
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banks
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of
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in
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USA
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the USA
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.
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, information passed through
communication
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 medium is
soft
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a soft
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 target for hackers and should
required
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require
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layer
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a layer
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 of protection. In conclusion,
communication
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 has its own advantages and disadvantages. If people can use it in
proper
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a proper
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 and effective way
then
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 it can play a vital role.
Therefore
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, with added security level,
communication
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 can offer many advantages.

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