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What distinguishes young people from their parents' or grandparents' generation is a lack of physical exercise. Today's generation are spending far too long playing computer games, chatting aimlessly on social networking sites or simply watching TV, and too little time being active. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 modern era, young ones are spending too much
time
 on electronic gadgets. They use electronic gadgets for different purposes
such
 as playing games, chatting and so on.
Due to
 ,
this
 they do less physical exercise.
Although
 I agree with the given notion up to a large extent, I
also
 believe that there are some other reasons for doing less exercise by youngsters. which will be elaborated
in
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 the subsequent paragraphs. A number of reasons why young
people
 prefer to spend their
time
 using smartphones and other gadgets
instead
 of doing physical exercises. The predominant one is that young
people
 want to get enjoyment by playing games on their smartphones. They do not want to do physical
activities
 as they are very laziest
people
. For doing physical
activities
 they need more energy which is not in today's generation. Young ones prefer less healthy food
that
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 is why they have less energy.
Moreover
, they do not need to go anywhere for meeting or communicating with their near and dear as they can talk to them with the aid of mobile phones
due to
this
 they are very laziest as compared to their ancestors. In the past ,
time
 there is no kind of electronic which is why
people
 have to go outside for meeting with others.
However
, there are some other reasons for performing less physical
activities
 by today's young
people
. In
this
 modern era , everyone becomes a workaholic, so they have less
time
 for going to the park, gym and many more. They have to do a lot of work in a day and which they have to perform only on computers. In
this
 competitive epoch, everyone has to do a lot of work for attaining success in their life.Owing to
this
 young ones are not able to do physical
activities
.Ergo,
this
 could lead to numerous health problems in the future which could not be worthwhile for them. In conclusion,
although
due to
 more usage of
technology
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 youngsters are not able to do physical
activities
, I
also
 believe that there are some others of performing less physical exercises by today's generation which are crucial to consider.
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