The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999.

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The pie chart compares figures for

visitors

to four categories of tourist attraction and to five different

theme

parks in Britain in 1999.

It is clear that

theme

parks and museums / galleries were the two most popular types of tourist attraction in that year. Blackpool Pleasure Beach received by far the highest proportion of

visitors

in the

theme

park

sector. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that 38% of the surveyed

visitors

went to a

theme

park

, and 37% of them went to a museum or gallery.

By contrast

, historic houses and monuments were visited by only 16% of the sample,

while

wildlife parks and zoos were the least popular of the four types of tourist

attraction

Fix the agreement mistake

attractions

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, with only 9% of

visitors

. In the

theme

park

sector, almost half of the people surveyed (47%) had been to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. Alton Towers was the second most popular amusement

park

, with 17% of the sample, followed by Pleasureland in Southport, with 16%.

Finally

, Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland Windsor

had

Unnecessary verb

apply

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each welcomed 10% of the surveyed

visitors

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