The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999.
The pie chart compares figures for
visitors
to four categories of tourist attraction and to five different theme
parks in Britain in 1999. It is clear that
theme
parks and museums / galleries were the two most popular types of tourist attraction in that year. Blackpool Pleasure Beach received by far the highest proportion of visitors
in the theme
park
sector. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that 38% of the surveyed visitors
went to a theme
park
, and 37% of them went to a museum or gallery. By contrast
, historic houses and monuments were visited by only 16% of the sample, while
wildlife parks and zoos were the least popular of the four types of tourist attraction
, with only 9% of Fix the agreement mistake
attractions
visitors
. In the theme
park
sector, almost half of the people surveyed (47%) had been to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. Alton Towers was the second most popular amusement park
, with 17% of the sample, followed by Pleasureland in Southport, with 16%. Finally
, Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland Windsor had
each welcomed 10% of the surveyed Unnecessary verb
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