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some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 feel that an estimation
someone's
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of someone's
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culture
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 and
character
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 from their clothing selection is possible. In my opinion, it is hard to get results about his/her life from
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person's
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a person's
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 choice of clothes only by visual interrogation.
First,
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people
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 used to understand other's
life style
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lifestyle
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 from their wearings. Cultures were isolated,
communities
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and communities
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 were not aware of how other ones had traditions.
Thus
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, it was simple to tell a lot
a
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about a
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person
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 from his/her
looking
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.
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However
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by
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with
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 the globalization of
earth
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the earth
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, cultures affected each other and became
cosmopolite
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.
Furthermore
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,
people
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 are more tend to wear what a
fasion
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fashion
 suggests nowadays
that is
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 hard to estimate his/her
orign
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origin
 with visual observation.
For example
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,
Indian
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the Indian
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 community, known as
local
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the local
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people
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 of America, can work
any
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in any
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 field not only in the country but
also
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 in
th
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the
 world. So
for instance
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, an Indian
person
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works
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who works
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 in Sweeden may have not only
clue
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a clue
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 from appearance about his/her
culture
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 or
character
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 if wears like Sweedish.
On the other hand
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, it is
contraversial
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controversial
 to judge
people
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 from their cloth choice because of
a
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the
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 possibility of misunderstandings even if being sure
about
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itabout
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. The
person
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 visually interrogated might have been living on
streets
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the streets
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 or may like
hippie style
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hippie-style
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 costumes
while
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 being rich. And
also
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 coloured
clothings
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clothes
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 do not depict any relevant
culture
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 often.
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, I wear usually sportive
clothings
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clothes
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 though I am not a
sport
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 player or it does not reflect my
character
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 and
culture
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. To summarize,
people
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 may select whatever they want to wear without thinking
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about the
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 correlation with their
culture
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 or
character
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that
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which
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 makes
for
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it for
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people
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to
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too
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 hard to tell about their appearance.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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