IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

The rapid development of technology allows students to get university and college degree by taking online courses. People have different opinions toward distance learning because it brings advantages and disadvantages. I will discuss both negative and positive sides of the online courses.

#development #technology #students #university #college #courses #people #distance
In
this
 era of the internet , learning through online
courses
 plays a key role in the development of
students
' careers.
However
, I will discuss both the positive
as well as
 negative sides of online
courses
. Online
courses
 give
students
courses
 which can be accessed from anywhere.
For example
, Many full-
time
 employees working in defence and individuals looking to enhance their skills in cutting-edge technologies. The major advantage is that it will save
time
 for these
students
 and they can study any
time
 they want and achieve their dreams.
In contrast
, the conventional method of visiting universities , in order to get a degree had its own advantages.
For instance
, In online
courses
 like ,udemy there is no stimulated
time
 limit to complete
courses
, they may take longer
time
 to complete given
courses
 than expected, even some
students
 are not focused on course completion which will not teach them discipline.
However
, In universities , we can participate in extra-curricular activities which will enhance our personality. In conclusion, Online
courses
 had both positive
as well as
 negative sides.The positive side is
students
 can learn online even if they are working,
while
 the negative side is
students
 were not able to participate in co-curricular activities like sports and debate competitions which will develop confidence and build personality.
Submitted by pratiksingh432 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: