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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
#diagrams #show #site #school #plan #changes
The next
two
 diagrams illustrate the future reorganization
in
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school
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the school
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 site in 2024, which
planned
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 for increasing the capability of
students
 from 600 to 1000 per year in
academy
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the academy
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.
Overall
, there are some key changes for
school
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 site.
Firstly
, In 2024, it will be the new buildings for
students
.
For instance
,
school
 building 3,
new
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 path between constructions one and
two
,
small
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a small
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area
 for
sports
, additional
car
 parking and
long
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a long
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 road around the whole
area
. First of all, In 2004, there
was
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 only 600
students
in
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on
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 campus. It was only
two
buidings
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buildings
 for lessons,
car
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a car
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 park before
main
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entraince
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entrance
,
sports
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the sports
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area
 ,
finally
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,
walking
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a walking
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 way between
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the entraince
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entraince
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entrance
 and
sports
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the sports
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 field. Plus,all facilities were surrounded by forest.
Secondly
, the main change will be the number of
students
 in 2024. It will have a significant increase to one thousand people in
academy
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.
Then
, there are new facilities
such
 as modern
school
 building №3. On top of that, on the right side, it will be the second
car
 park, after that, it will
a
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decreased
sports
area
.
However
,
academy
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 planned to make
main
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the main
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 road longer than
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previous
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, from
main
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 entrance to
car
 park
two
.
Last
 but not least, the first and second studying buildings will
be have
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 passage between them. Because
,
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 it will be comfortable and save time for
stuff
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staff
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 and
students
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, school, students, area, sports, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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