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Some people think we need more female leaders to create world peace and reduce violence. To what extent do you agree?

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Some individuals think we need more
women
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 presidents to create a peaceful and less violent world. I completely disagree with that statement because the gender of leaders is not a factor in
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 and having a female leader might create more
problems
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. Nowadays, we are facing many different
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 which are not because of the president's gender. Major reasons for that are money, land or religion.
Countries
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 are fighting for their civilization to provide them with better living standards.
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, many nations are trying to occupy other
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 to spare their religion.
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, in the Middle East, ISIS always attacking and killing people because of their religion.
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, one of ISIS's leaders is a woman and they have a special group only females can join. Having a female leader can be problematic for not-developed
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. In those
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 namely Iraq or ,Syria
women
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 are not able to solve the problem because those people have no respect for or are not big fans of
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's presidents. Presidents have to be dominant in some cases and should take solid decisions when it is needed. Amongst the
women
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 that characteristic feature is rare. were
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 likely to take care of their children and for ,them it is hard to leave their offspring.
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 , In my ,department we had
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-responsible nurses. She could not manage her duty because males were not obeying her orders and she was a kind person. In conclusion, the primary reason for the world's
problems
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 is not gender and
women
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 are not capable to be leaders because of their nature.
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