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Some people believe that the government should not spend money on international aid when they have their own disadvantaged people (the homeless and unemployed). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Since there are a vast amount of
resources
 contributed to international
aid
, there have been various controversial debates on whether
governments
 should spend their countries'
resources
 abroad or allocate them to national issues. In my opinion, the allocation of money for disadvantaged individuals in each country is more practical than providing
resources
 for international
support
. First and foremost, dwellers in many nations are facing many local problems
such
 as homeless, diseases and unemployment which need immediate
support
 from their authorities. To solve these problems, the help from
governments
 contributes major financial and human
resources
 to recover that country's economy and sustain inhabitants' living standards.
Moreover
, their
governments
 can raise the sense of initiative in many fields to easily deal with
instead
 of waiting for international
aid
.
For example
, during the period of Covid-19, policymakers in Vietnam published some laws to help unemployed workers and help foreigners who became stuck in Vietnam come back to their hometown initiative.
Furthermore
, some types of international
aid
 that many countries have to contribute are unfeasible in many ways.
For instance
, the commitment between Vietnam and Asia to help illiterate children to go to school was impractical
due to
 the fact that
this
 commitment only gave financial and human
support
 to West Asia
instead
 of spreading them into all areas in Asia.
Otherwise
, the pace of receiving and supporting money in many organizations is quite slow that can not catch up with the occurred crisis.
Thus
, individuals may suffer some detrimental issues that affect directly their daily life for a longer time. In conclusion,
while
 allocating
resources
 to international
support
 is crucial, I believe that
governments
 should alleviate them and spend more to cope with local issues because of many occurred detrimental problems and the unfeasibility of some types of international
aid
.
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