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The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.

The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.
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The first line graph illustrates the number of train passengers in Sydney, The second line graph gives information on the rate of
trains
 running on the
time
 between 1995 and 2004.
Overall
, the number of train passengers experienced an upward trend
while
 the percentage of
trains
 running on
time
 showed a downward trend. The rate of
trains
time
 fluctuated throughout the period. At the beginning of the trend, the number of customers accounted for 250
million
.
Subsequently
, gradually increased to nearly 266
million
 until 1999.
Then
, increased significantly and peaked at 300
million
 in 2001. Afterwards, plummeted to 280
million
 in 2002. Between 2002 and 2004 remained relatively stable. In 1995, the rate of
trains
time
 made up around 93% but started to fall steadily to just above 86% until 1997. From 1997 to 2003, went up and down between 85% and approximately 93%. Between 2003 and 2004, sharply decreased to almost 73% and hit to low-point.
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