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The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.

The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.
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The first line graph illustrates the number of train passengers in Sydney, The second line graph gives information on the rate of
trains
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 running on the
time
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 between 1995 and 2004.
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, the number of train passengers experienced an upward trend
while
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 the percentage of
trains
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 running on
time
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 showed a downward trend. The rate of
trains
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time
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 fluctuated throughout the period. At the beginning of the trend, the number of customers accounted for 250
million
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.
Subsequently
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, gradually increased to nearly 266
million
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 until 1999.
Then
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, increased significantly and peaked at 300
million
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 in 2001. Afterwards, plummeted to 280
million
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 in 2002. Between 2002 and 2004 remained relatively stable. In 1995, the rate of
trains
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time
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 made up around 93% but started to fall steadily to just above 86% until 1997. From 1997 to 2003, went up and down between 85% and approximately 93%. Between 2003 and 2004, sharply decreased to almost 73% and hit to low-point.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trains, time, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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