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Some people believe that development of computer has changed the human lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
development
 of
computers
, in my opinion, is a big breakthrough in science and in everyday life, as it solves many issues and problems, but the only negative is that
computers
 are the cause of the progression of our laziness and procrastination
Computer
development
 continues to
this
 day,
for example
, I can say about the quantum
computer
 it is better than a regular
computer
 as it is faster smarter and safer than regular
computer
development
 give us more comfort in our life simple example is chatting. You don't need anymore some letters you can chat with your friend with the help of
computers
 And watch some films and serials too. In general,
computers
 give us progress in science (bio,chemistry,physic,math) discovers in physic is the Hadron Collider of course not only with
computer
development
 but mostly thanks to the
computer
.
Computers
 give breakthroughs in the general
education
 system Assessment system Quality of
education
 Methods of
education
 let's look at each separately Assessment system – about a
computer
 journal (kundalik.com) it can help teachers and students for comprehension their
overall
 score/marks in a session for students and term for peoples Methods of
education
 – something like projects, presentations or instructional videos or online lessons Quality of
education
 - thanks to
computers
, the possibility of forging grades disappears and
also
 new methods educations. In conclusion, I wanna say
Computer
development
 is pretty well for us and gives us more ways to progress and more ways to achieve a comfortable lifestyle.
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