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Some people think that technology is now an invaluable study tool for young people. Others, however, believe that it is harmful for the studying process. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Technology
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 is seen by some
people
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 as the key to success for young
students
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. Others,
however
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, argue that it has a negative impact, but I think
technology
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 is a positive force for the young as they study. Some are of the opinion that the role played by
technology
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 in the studying
process
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 for the young is very important
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 because compared to the past, studying is now much more efficient and convenient.
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, recent advances in areas
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 as mobile
technology
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 mean that information can now be accessed at any time and anywhere,
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 reducing the effort
students
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 need to devote to researching for essays and studies, in general. Others,
however
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, believe that the negative effect
technology
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 can have on young
people
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's studies is not insignificant. They argue that far from improving the way young
people
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 deal with knowledge as they study,
technology
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 is, in effect, harming the thinking
process
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. Their argument is that
students
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' thinking is being done by laptops and tablets.
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, they are unable to analyse and use the information they encounter, which can damage their education. Personally, I feel that
technology
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 is useful for young
students
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 nowadays.
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 improving the studying
process
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,
technology
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 allows young
people
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 to manipulate the vast amounts of knowledge they encounter via the internet and in libraries. Without
technology
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, in fact, preparing for exams and studying would both be impractical, because they would not be able to look at,
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 and examine the vast amounts of information at their fingertips. As we have seen,
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 the effect of
technology
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 on young
people
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’s studies is seen as both positive and negative, on balance I think it is a valuable tool.
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