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Some people use the social media to keep up with people and events. Do you think the advantages of this technology outweighs its' disadvantages

#people #media #events #technology
Due to
 modernization,technology is increasing day by day. Nowadays,people use Instagram
andFacebook
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and Facebook
 to keep the memory of crowds and events.I personally think the benefits of
this
 trend outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. To start with,Big
globe
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Globe
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 is turning into a tiny village with the help of
social
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a social
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 approach. Social
media
 is the fastest approach to sending a message from one corner to another corner of the world over the past fashion when communities used to send messages through birds which could take from days to weeks.It
also
 offers the option of video
call
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.
As a result
,many international meetings could be done only on social
media
instead
 of going there.The new idea is safe and secure as birds could be lost.Folk can bring social
media
 anywhere in the world and it is extremely to use.They can capture the
pricous
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precious
 movements and even share them with friends.
However
,owing to cyber attacks or hacking, some sensitive information could be leaked.
For example
,10 of Sidhu moose
wala's
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wall's
 songs got leaked as one of his friends shared songs on the Instagram platform.
Besides
,
crowd
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 are getting lazy.They do not feel to go outside to meet new folks and
do
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gossip as they can
do
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live chatting
while
 sitting at home.
This
 leads to
obestiy
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obesity
 which is the main problem of various problems
such
 as heart attack or high blood pressure which leads to depression.
To conclude
, social
media
 is
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 and fastest approach
of
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 interacting with folk
however
 there are some drawbacks but for ,me it is obvious that its benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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