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Government investment in the art, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree

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Investment is necessary for the growth of various sectors. Funding from the government towards artistic content is a waste of resources, as the money should be
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 toward the masses. I disagree with
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 as art helps in relieving mental stress and promoting a good state of
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. These points will be
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 explained with relevant examples and a logical conclusion in the subsequent paragraphs.
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 with, art can be defined as the very essence of life. Not only does it have a calming effect on the human
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, but it
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 opens the
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 to a thousand possibilities.
Music
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, stage plays, and plantings have been known to relieve stress and tension in individuals.
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 research conducted by a mental health institute, it was discovered that patients exposed to
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, paintings, and good scenery are known to make quick recovery than patients kept in confinement.
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,
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 has been known to promote a good state of
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 and serve as a diversion therapy for people facing various challenges, because of the diversity of
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 there is a song of choice for everyone.
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, Saul in the Bible's insanity could only be relieved by the sound of the harp David played to him. In conclusion,
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 essay argued that the investment that goes into art is not a waste of time, as it helps to keep one in check mentally. Craft is just as important as any other sector and needs to be given a chance.
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