Some countries have legal ages at which people can drink. Other countries believe not have strict laws is a better policy. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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In today's world, it is known that some countries do not have strict
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laws
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about
age
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the age
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when
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may start to drink alcohol. From my point of view, it can
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in tragic consequences for
youngsters
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.
Howevere
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However
, there are some
people
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who think that strict rules may cause increased
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interest
for
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drinking from young
people
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. On the one side, there are countries that do not want to make special
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laws
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to restrict young
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from alcohol because they think that most
of
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apply
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teenagers
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may be
intersted
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interested
in things that are not accessible
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them. It is thought that it can be a part of their nature.
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, even a lot of doctors, who treat individuals with mental diseases, suggest
to give
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more free for
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.
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, there is a new research, which
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in the USA a few years ago, that shows dependence between families with a strong discipline and the number of protests from
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in
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families. On the other side, I think that the government should control the age
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at when
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when
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which
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teenagers
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may start drinking by implementing strict
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laws
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. Obviously,
that
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apply
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numerous
of
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people
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like to try something new,
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are not an
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exception
, but they do not
enough
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have enough
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self-control.
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, alcohol can lead them to
dangerouse
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dangerous
situations.
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,
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police reports, most of
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teenagers
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the teenagers
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who
brake
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broke
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the
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law
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were drunk.
To sum up
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, in my opinion, the
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that control
age
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the age
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when young
people
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can drink is
good
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a good
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policy because it may lead to
the
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reduction
the
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number of
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* crimes.
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Nevertheless
, there are some individuals who believe that
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encourage
teenagers
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to break
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them
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal drinking age
  • Underage drinking
  • Health repercussions
  • Addiction
  • Drunk-driving
  • Responsible drinking
  • Forbidden fruit
  • Social rituals
  • Public health
  • Safety framework
  • Risks of alcohol
  • Cultural differences
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