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Some countries have legal ages at which people can drink. Other countries believe not have strict laws is a better policy. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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In today's world, it is known that some countries do not have strict
lows
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laws
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 about
age
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the age
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 when
people
 may start to drink alcohol. From my point of view, it can
resulted
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 in tragic consequences for
youngsters
.
Howevere
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However
, there are some
people
 who think that strict rules may cause increased
interes
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interest
for
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in
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 drinking from young
people
. On the one side, there are countries that do not want to make special
lows
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laws
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 to restrict young
people
 from alcohol because they think that most
of
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apply
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teenagers
 may be
intersted
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interested
 in things that are not accessible
for
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to
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 them. It is thought that it can be a part of their nature.
Moreover
, even a lot of doctors, who treat individuals with mental diseases, suggest
to give
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 more free for
youngsters
.
For example
, there is a new research, which
created
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 in the USA a few years ago, that shows dependence between families with a strong discipline and the number of protests from
youngsters
 in
this
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 families. On the other side, I think that the government should control the age
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at when
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when
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which
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teenagers
 may start drinking by implementing strict
lows
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laws
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. Obviously,
that
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apply
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numerous
of
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people
 like to try something new,
youngsters
 are not an
exaption
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exception
, but they do not
enough
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have enough
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 self-control.
Thus
, alcohol can lead them to
dangerouse
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dangerous
 situations.
For instance
,
according to
 police reports, most of
teenagers
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the teenagers
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 who
brake
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broke
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 the
low
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law
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 were drunk.
To sum up
, in my opinion, the
lows
 that control
age
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the age
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 when young
people
 can drink is
good
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a good
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 policy because it may lead to
the
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 reduction
the
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in the
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 number of
youngsters
* crimes.
Newertheless
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Nevertheless
, there are some individuals who believe that
lows
 encourage
teenagers
 to break
it
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them
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.
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