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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

People seem to be either excited or concerned about the future impact of artificial
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 on their daily
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. Personally, I understand both opposing feelings. I am fascinated by the developments of artificial
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 and apprehensive about its possible negative effects. On the one hand, advances in artificial
intelligence
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 have some obvious benefits.
Firstly
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,
this
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 technology does better than
humans
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 in these jobs that
need
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 a precious and big amount of calculation.
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, robots can operate surgical procedures better than human doctors
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 we already have cars that use sensors and cameras to drive themselves.
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 technologies help to reduce the likelihood of human errors. It is easy to imagine how these technologies will steadily improve human well-being.
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, I share the concern of people who believe that artificial
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 may harm us if we are not careful. In the short term, we will see a rise in unemployment as machines or software programs can replace
humans
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 in several jobs.
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self-driving
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 car technology can cause redundancies in driving jobs
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 as taxi drivers, bus drivers, or lorry drivers. In the medium term, being replaced by robots may cause
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deskilled
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 and lose the sense of purpose in life. In the long term, there is a fear that robots can make decisions without human supervision and without regard for the well-being of
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. In conclusion, artificial
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 may bring undoubted benefits to our
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but
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 it may cause the potential risks that we have to predict.

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structure
In each paragraph, state your point in a short line at the start. Use simple words and clear order like 'first', 'then', 'also', 'but'.
task
Make your view clear at the end. A simple sentence like 'In my view, ...' helps the reader know your side.
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Give more real examples for both sides. For example, how AI can help doctors and how it can hit jobs.
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You show two sides and a wish to learn new tech.
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You give real cases like self driving cars and robot surgery.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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