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Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. Thus , they argue leads to more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfactory working life?

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Competition in every sector is raising day by day,
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 of individuals pursue their goals from young age enthusiastically and
thus
, their professional life become more delightful.
This
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given
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 notion
along with
few
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a few
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 measures to make their
career
 more satisfactory in looming paragraphs. First and foremost, is
is
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it
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 worthwhile to focus on the adequate path to start their
career
 early? Undoubtedly yes. The most prominent factor is that being
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 leads youth to have more enlightenment on the subjects necessary to accomplish their goal. More specifically, they can lead them to acquire
required
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 knowledge about the potential
career
. To epitome, the toddlers who aimed to become IAS or IPS Officer in India
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starts
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 the preparation for the entrance exam from
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 young age. Eventually, the person gets mentally focused and does not have any confusion
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 about their
career
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the
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adult age. Moving
further
, there are enormous factors
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which can help to attain inner pleasure from the job and the most superlative way is to get employed in their
dreamed
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 field of work. They should not randomly
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 for any job with
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 pay scale. Salary is not only the factor which can allocate them satisfaction.
In other words
, they cannot progress in their job if they will not get the desired work. They will always have
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second thoughts to resign from the current organisation and follow their goals.
For instance
, the survey conducted in the
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Google
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 organisation showcased that nearly half of its
worker
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workers
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 choose employment
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only as
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 matter of high remunerations, but they do it relish their work. In crux, it is totally rational to select the professional path from the
teenager
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 time period because
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 it not only
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 more understanding but
also
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the person
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do
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 not suffer from disappointment.
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