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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly common for people to take
home schooling
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homeschooling
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. Some people think that taking homeschooling is the best way to
impove
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improve
children
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's
ability
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abilities
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,
while
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 others argue that it is
benefecial
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beneficial
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children
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 to take formal
school
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.
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, I agree with those who believe that taking formal
school
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 is the best way to improve young learners' abilities. On the one hand, homeschooling offers a flexible time. By taking homeschooling,
students
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 can choose the time
that is
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 suitable for them. They can
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having
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 an outdoor class that help them understand the material better
with
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in
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real
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the real
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 situation.
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,
in
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on
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 some
occasion
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occasions
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,
children
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 can go to the zoo in order to learn about animals.
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, it will make them more
focus
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focused
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 on improving their knowledge and ability.
On the other hand
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, taking formal education will help the
students
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improving
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 their social skills. By taking formal
school
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,
students
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 can meet many people from different backgrounds.
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,
children
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 can learn how to
miggle
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mingle
wiggle
 with others in the class.
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, it will make the bond between them stronger.
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, homeschooling offers some benefits
such
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 as
help
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helping
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 the
students
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improving
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improve
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 themselves with
less
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fewer
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 distractors. It
also
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 gives them
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to
learning
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 by doing.
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,
formal
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the formal
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school
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 serves
the
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apply
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students
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 with
diversity
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diverse
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 background of the
students
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. It will
benefecial
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beneficial
 for them to increase their social skills. I
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am fimly
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fimly
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firmly
finally
 convinced that taking formal
school
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 is the best way to improve the student’s ability
due to
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 the social skills that
offers
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offer
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 by
formal
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the formal
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school
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. It will help them to adapt well in their work life later.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tailored learning
  • peer pressure
  • flexibility
  • instill values
  • socialization
  • communication skills
  • specialized facilities
  • extracurricular activities
  • diversity
  • structured environment
  • customized education
  • well-rounded education
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