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Students at school and universities learn more from teachers than other sources. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #school #universities #teachers #sources
Students are the future generation who can shape our nation.
Now a days
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 there are a lot more changes in
aour
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your
our
 academics.
This
 is for the betterment and success of the wards. It is often argued that pupils at educational institutions gain
an extra knowledge
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 from the lecturers
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any
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 other materials. I partially agree with the statement and the reasons are
being
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substantiated in the paragraphs below. I believe that when we have primary schooling from first to tenth standards, we are immature enough to decide
ourselves
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for ourselves
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. The topics and concepts are designed as per the norms of the board. In
this
 situation, the ward is dependent
of
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on
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 the faculty and
to be
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 guided
accordingly
.
For example
,
student
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the student
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 is given homework on a daily basis and corrected by a mentor to keep a check and rectify the mistakes.
Hence
,
this
 mentorship is necessary enough to develop their future and make them mature. My opinion on the issue
being
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the
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 students in
the
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higher institutions are
well versed
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 and capable of handling the syllabus even though not been explained by a professor. Eventually,
this
 shows their adulthood and self-dependence on the study.
Thus
, at some
points
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of
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in
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 time, we need a teacher but when it comes
in
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to
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 professional studies we can handle
on
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it on
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 our own.
To conclude
, it's always not a compulsion for the students to depend on the faculty, but in
childhood
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 they help us to be well trained and they are the guide. In
case
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 of adolescents, the scenario is different.
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