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The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure,business and commercial purpose around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flight should be texted more?

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Humans never stop travelling worldwide when they have a chance to do so. Given the fact that
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 is getting better and travel is getting easier with
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the plane
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plane
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planes
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, the
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 of
flights
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 for all kinds of
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 have been seen
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 worldwide over recently. In
this
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 increment and explain why
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 must be done more regularly. Two beneficial factors contribute to an enormous increase in
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. The first is that it helps
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 worldwide. It is recorded that not only the airline have gained massive profits if all planes are occupied full time, but other supporting service businesses
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 and restaurants are increasing in revenue too. To support
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tourism or traveller better, more jobs have been created from frontline service staff to board of management in hospitality services. The capacity of
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 has been reconnected globally after 3 years as before the pandemic helping to provide 50
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 additional vacancies in tourism service. The
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 increment,
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 negative impact
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 the environment. The more the
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 are operated in the sky, the more fuel it is being utilized. Needless to say, the machinery operation can cause
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pollution via their fuel extinguisher.
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 the beach, it is
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 commonly seen a variety of rubbish left behind by tourism and sea sculptures being hurt by those. There is no doubt that the airlines
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 a large portion of revenue to the
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 income, but
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 all
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 must be checked
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by both
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 engines and cabin crew more regularly to ensure that passengers' life is absolutely safe and secured. Many
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 accidents
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 been alerted to the passengers recently
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 MH370 disappearance, which has been unknown for now and many myths have been developed
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. In conclusion, travelling by air is always the most convenient option for all people, which helps to boost
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 economy and human wealth. But
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 it is recommended that
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 must be tested all the time to make sure the security of passengers.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural exchange
  • Tourism
  • Economic growth
  • Aviation industry
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Noise pollution
  • Infrastructure strain
  • Taxation
  • Affordability
  • Sustainable aviation technology
  • Revenue
  • Climate change
  • Local economies
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