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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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One of the directions of modern philosophical thought is libertarianism. Libertarians consider freedom as the most important for a fair society. Freedom should be equal
as well as
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 in finance, but often these two paradigms conflict with each other. In my essay, I will consider different
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 to equality of the economic situation in the population. In the
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 I want to start from the concept of freedom. The earning of each person should be equal
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 state taxes. People who have done great efforts to achieve an increased income shouldn’t be punished. Efforts devaluation can lead to
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 decrease and turn active citizens
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passive
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, increasing taxes for rich people leads to averaging the income of the population.
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 leads to a lack of jealousy and a decrease
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 aggression
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 each other, which causes a decrease in crime.
Thus
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, the impact on income can affect the safety
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 the country. To avoid a critical stratification in society, it
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 don’t pinch people with high wealth, but to support the lower economic class. The position of
such
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 countries is close to me.
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, Netherlands, the state gives benefits to small businesses, and when the profit increases, the standard taxation system begins.
Thus
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, I firmly believe that the future is with replacing the oppression of some with the support of others.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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