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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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One of the directions of modern philosophical thought is libertarianism. Libertarians consider freedom as the most important for a fair society. Freedom should be equal
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 to equality of the economic situation in the population. In the
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 I want to start from the concept of freedom. The earning of each person should be equal
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 state taxes. People who have done great efforts to achieve an increased income shouldn’t be punished. Efforts devaluation can lead to
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 decrease and turn active citizens
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 leads to a lack of jealousy and a decrease
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 aggression
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 each other, which causes a decrease in crime.
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 the country. To avoid a critical stratification in society, it
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 don’t pinch people with high wealth, but to support the lower economic class. The position of
such
 countries is close to me.
For example
, Netherlands, the state gives benefits to small businesses, and when the profit increases, the standard taxation system begins.
Thus
, I firmly believe that the future is with replacing the oppression of some with the support of others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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