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mojdeh, 10:03 AMSome people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other people think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen at TV and the internet. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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 days, experiencing other countries is an interesting activity among young
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. There are two main ways to do
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 abroad and watching
TV
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 and the
internet
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. Many
people
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 said that visiting other nations is abundant because
TV
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 and the
internet
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 provide all the
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 you need.
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 the one hand,
TV
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 and the
internet
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 bring many benefits for
people
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 who want to gain knowledge about other cultures.
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, it is an accessible and convenient tool.
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,
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 can easily search
about
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for
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the
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apply
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information
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of
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about
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 a country on the
internet
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 or
watching
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watch
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 movies which include
information
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 about that nation. It helps
people
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 access
the
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information
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 easily and know other countries without going abroad.
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, it is much cheaper for
people
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 who do not have the condition to travel.
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, it is so pricy to go outside your country that most
people
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 can not
afford
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. But with
TV
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 and the
internet
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,
people
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 almost do not have to pay but they still have the experience.
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 the other hand, there are
also
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 some advantages
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traveling
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travelling
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 abroad.
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, you can experience other cultures in real life.
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, visitors can do some traditional activities with local
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.
travelers
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 will gain wonderful experiences and know more about the country in real life.
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,
people
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 can learn to speak
new
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 foreign language.
People
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 can start learning
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 language when they go to other nations. It is a rare opportunity for
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 to learn and practice
new
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 language with local
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 and widen their knowledge. In conclusion, it is said that it is unnecessary to go abroad because all the knowledge can be gained by watching
TV
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 and searching the
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internet
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Internet
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. Personally, I think
people
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 should travel abroad to experience new cultures if they have the condition.

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