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The world has seen an enormous increase in flights for leisure,business and commercial purpose around the world over recent years. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of such flights? Do you think flight should be texed more?

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When compared to what was used as the most effective
modes
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 of transport 100 years ago, it is obvious that the number of
flights
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 has increased much in
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 of travel purposes and in a wide range of the destination. In
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 essay, I will outline the main benefits and drawbacks of flight increment and explain why it must be taxed more. There are two clear beneficial factors regarding the increase in travel. The most significant factor is that it helps boost the economy worldwide. It is recorded that not only the airline has gained massive profits if all planes are occupied full time, but other supporting service businesses
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 as hotels and restaurants have increased in revenue too. The other major factor is the increase in
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 rate. To support
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tourism or traveller better, more jobs have been created from front-line service staff to board of management in hospitality services. The capacity of
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 has been reconnected globally after 3 years as
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before the pandemic helping to provide 50 per cent additional vacancies in tourism service. The flight increase,
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, does have a negative impact on the
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. The more the
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 are operated in the sky, the more fuel is utilized. Needless to say,
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machinery operation can cause pollution via their exhaust. On the beach, it is
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 commonly seen a variety of rubbish left behind by tourists and sea sculptures being hurt by those. Given its negative impact, it is vital, in my view, to have
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 taxed more to supplement
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environment
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 protection. Setting higher floor
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of
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 the air ticket for domestic travel would deter many people from travelling by air. They,
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other modes of transportation
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 as buses, coaches or trains for a short destination. In conclusion, travelling by air is always the most convenient option for all people, which helps to boost the worldwide economy and individual income.
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, despite the fact that it has
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 impact on the
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, taxation should be imposed more to supplement
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural exchange
  • Tourism
  • Economic growth
  • Aviation industry
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Noise pollution
  • Infrastructure strain
  • Taxation
  • Affordability
  • Sustainable aviation technology
  • Revenue
  • Climate change
  • Local economies
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