The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram presents general information about

life

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the life

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cycle of a large fish which is called

Salmon

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Overall

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this

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big fish has 3 stages in its life. Beginning as a

fry

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then

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it grows to turn into a smolt and

end

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ends

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with

adult

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the adult

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Salmon

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stage.

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the first step,

Salmon

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’s eggs are situated between small rocks near the reeds at the upper river with

slow moving

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water. It takes 5-6 months for an egg to turn into a

fry

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which is still small

with

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apply

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about 3-8 cm

length

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in length

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. It is the first serious stage of

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Salmon’

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Salmon’s

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life.

Fry

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lives in the lower river with

fast flowing

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fast-flowing

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water and remains there for about 4 years. After that,

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fry

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the fry

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develops into

smolt

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a smolt

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with 12-15 cm in length.

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this

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this

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young

Salmon

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immigrates to

open

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the open

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sea and

live

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lives

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there for approximately 5 years.

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, Smolt cultivates and becomes an adult

Salmon

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which grows enough to reach the length of 70-76 cm.

This

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Big

Salmon

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goes to the

up side

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upside

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of the river to

lays

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lay

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its eggs.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, fry with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

173 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

life cycle
species
spawn
freshwater
saltwater
migration
larvae
fry
smolt
mature
ocean
predators
mortality
reproduction
navigational challenges
ecosystem
sustainability

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