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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart depicts the outcome of a survey about netizens'
coffee
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 and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian
cities
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.
Overall
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, in four
cities
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: Sydney, Melbourne,
Brisbane
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, and Hobart, their highest
habit
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 was going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea in the
last
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 four weeks. The lowest routine that
people
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 did was buying fresh
coffee
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 and it happened in all
cities
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. In Sydney, Melbourne,
Brisbane
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, and Hobart, the popular
habit
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 was going to a cafe for
coffee
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 or tea in the
last
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 four weeks, all the percentages above 55% with the highest in Melbourne at 63%. Just for Adelaide, most
people
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 bought instant
coffee
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. In five
cities
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, the lowest
habit
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 of netizens was buying fresh
coffee
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. The lowest number is in
Brisbane
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 at 34%. The
habit
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 of
people
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 buying instant
coffee
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 is not too low but not too higher, in the middle. The highest percentage for bought instant
coffee
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 did by
people
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 in
Brisbane
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 with 50%. The result is higher than the
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 but not too popular than
netizen
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netizens
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 who went to a cafe.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, brisbane, habit, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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