Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays, there is
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number of arguments that
religion
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education should be promoted ,
while
others believe it should be prevented.
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essay will discuss both
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along with
my opinion. On the one hand, the proponents of introducing
religion
classes
believe that it would enhance the well round knowledge of children
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by learning and reading from books under the proper monitoring of teachers.
Moreover
, religious
classes
will provide a sense of connectivity with history to adolescents.
For instance
, tutors can teach them in a variety of ways,
such
as by organising smart
classes
realated
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related
background of historical dramas or by holding debates between the students.
On the other hand
, the opponents of initiating
religion
classes
beleive
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believe
it would lead to class conflicts among small children.
In other words
, if the teacher is having
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anti-social perspective,
then
such
teaching can
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into
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negative consequences.
For example
, the learning of a child will definitely
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his individual behaviour if the right mode of education is not provided to him.
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Moreover
, it can
also
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a wastage
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wastage
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of time, if a school is providing education related to a particular
religion
only and at the same time adolescents are from different cultures. In conclusion,
although
the religious
classes
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some positive effects yet, in my belief the disadvantages far outweigh the advantages as it
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in spreading negative views and
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of
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time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • religious education
  • multi-faith society
  • values and ethics
  • tolerance
  • diversity
  • religious freedom
  • secular education
  • curriculum
  • worldviews
  • interfaith dialogue
  • religious literacy
  • moral guidance
  • cultural understanding
  • critical thinking
  • respect
  • indoctrination
  • religious beliefs
  • secular state
  • religious extremism
  • academic subject
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