Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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education should be promoted ,

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believe that it would enhance the well round knowledge of children

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by learning and reading from books under the proper monitoring of teachers.

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background of historical dramas or by holding debates between the students.

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it would lead to class conflicts among small children.

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negative consequences.

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his individual behaviour if the right mode of education is not provided to him.

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of time, if a school is providing education related to a particular

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only and at the same time adolescents are from different cultures. In conclusion,

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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232 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

religious education
multi-faith society
values and ethics
tolerance
diversity
religious freedom
secular education
curriculum
worldviews
interfaith dialogue
religious literacy
moral guidance
cultural understanding
critical thinking
respect
indoctrination
religious beliefs
secular state
religious extremism
academic subject

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Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drinks that have been scientifically proven to be bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write papers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish details of people,s private life while others think it should be controlled. Discuss both views.

with recent improvements online, it is increasingly possible for people to leave reviews for goods and services they have purchased. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this?