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You are working for a company and need to take some time off work. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - explain why you want to take time off - give details of the amount of time you need - suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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 letter to inquire
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about an

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 absentation
on
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from

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while
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I was teaching how to play tennis properly to my child when things were about to change. The story started when he accidentally broke his arm dramatically. We went to the hospital and they took care of him and rounded a bandage on
kid's
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the kid's

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 arm before warning
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him not

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 to move the lining for two months. I have to accompany my son at his time
that is
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 why I am asking permission. As you know, %90 of my
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consist
Correct subject-verb agreement
consists

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 of online and offline tasks on
computer
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the computer
a computer

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what
Correct pronoun usage
which

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 means that I can
work
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 from home hopefully. If you seek the lack which rest of my job, I may assure you that will be compensated.
To sum up
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, I would be pleased if the company take my request into consideration which I always
work
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 passionately for. Best regards.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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