Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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Many
people
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believe that modern
technology
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has brought
people
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together but others believe that
technology
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has driven
people
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apart. I think both of these are true sometimes but
mosty
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most
technology
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is good and
people
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together more than apart. Nowadays there are many ways of
communicate
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with
technology
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. If I went to live in another country
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I can still speak with family and
friends
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everyday
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. Everyone has
smartphones
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and are communicate
everyday
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every day
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with
people
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you can call and send sms and
also
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emails. Social media is
also
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good for
communicate
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communicating
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people
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with people
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many
people
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are on social media and often all of
you
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your
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family and
friends
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can communicate together and have the same thing to see maybe videos and
photo
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shared too.
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there are new communications on
smartphones
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like
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
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and
also
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facetime
snapchat
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. These are things new on phones and
everybody
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communicate
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communicates
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all the time all over the world and is free
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everybody
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for everybody
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.
This
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is good.
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hand
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technology
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has driven
people
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apart. maybe some
people
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are with all their time on the computer or with
the
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mobil
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mobile
phone.
This
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is not a good thing for
people
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to make
friends
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and
also
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to speak with someone
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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physical
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physically
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. Sometimes when me and my
friends
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are together in
restaurant
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restaurants
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or
cafe
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cafes
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everybody
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is using
smartphones
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, they are sending messages or making tweets or checking
facebook
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Facebook
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or even playing games. I don’t think
this
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is good because
friends
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should be together talking and not on
smartphones
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.
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you see
people
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on
bus
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buses
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or trains or in town and
everybody
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is with
technology
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but nobody is talking with
peoples
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people
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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