The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.
The line graph shows
that
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apply
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the information the
number
of tourists visiting a museum in the
summer
and winter in 2003.
Overall
, the
number
of
guest
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guests
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entering in
summer
is higher than it
in
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is in
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winter. The
number
of visitors in
summer
was
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rised
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raised
risen
gradually to 1400, because in
summer
all everybody has
a days
Correct the article-noun agreement
a day
days
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off so they can go somewhere to take a rest.
In addition
, their parents take them to a museum, a place for children can improve their knowledge, but it decreased slowly to 0 in 1800. The
number
of guests in winter was lower than it
in
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was in
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summer
, it was the highest in 1200 about 600 people, and dropped quickly to 0
in
Change preposition
from
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1400 to 1800.
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