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Some people think that university education should be free for everyone regardless of their income. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Some people think that university education should be free for everyone regardless of their income. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
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These days, a lot of
students
 want to
study
 but they can't because their families do not have enough money and they barely can live. I believe everyone must have the chance to enter university, but many
students
 cannot because they do not have enough money to go to university. Because of that, I suggest the government help the
students
 complete their
education
. If the government make the student
study
 free they can have a nation of educated people and help their
country
 to develop. At the same time, they can live their dream and have a comfortable life with their family. It will help the
country
. The second reason is if they have free
education
 all the
students
 will come from all over the
country
 and
study
 poverty will decrease. the family will allow their kids to
study
. a lot of them will now start without crime, no drugs no stealing. They will focus on the
study
 and the crimes will decrease too. there will be more awareness in society about these crimes more save and
then
 the
country
 has a lot of educated
students
 to help them If the government make
education
 free the student will take the chance and
study
 hard. I suggest making
education
 at university free because
,
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 I want all the
students
 their chances
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