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Some people think that university education should be free for everyone regardless of their income. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Some people think that university education should be free for everyone regardless of their income. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
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These days, a lot of
students
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 want to
study
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 but they can't because their families do not have enough money and they barely can live. I believe everyone must have the chance to enter university, but many
students
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 cannot because they do not have enough money to go to university. Because of that, I suggest the government help the
students
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 complete their
education
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. If the government make the student
study
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 free they can have a nation of educated people and help their
country
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 to develop. At the same time, they can live their dream and have a comfortable life with their family. It will help the
country
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. The second reason is if they have free
education
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 all the
students
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 will come from all over the
country
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 and
study
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 poverty will decrease. the family will allow their kids to
study
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. a lot of them will now start without crime, no drugs no stealing. They will focus on the
study
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 and the crimes will decrease too. there will be more awareness in society about these crimes more save and
then
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 the
country
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 has a lot of educated
students
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 to help them If the government make
education
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 free the student will take the chance and
study
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 hard. I suggest making
education
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 at university free because
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 I want all the
students
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 their chances
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