The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.
The primary line chart indicates how many passengers travelled by Sydney's train between 1995 and 2004
while
the other illustrates the percentage of the trains which came on time.
Overall
, what stand
out from the graph is that Change the verb form
stands
whereas
the number of commuters and travellers went up gradually before its
dropping from 2001, the proportion of punctual railways witnessed a fluctuation followed by a striking fall.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
To begin
with the figure of
passengers, their starting number was 250 million in 1995, after which grew by degree until the peak at 300 million in 2001. Change preposition
for
However
, in the next year, by
Change preposition
in
the
contrast to the proceeding rising, it slumped to end up with the figure at 280 Correct article usage
apply
millions
which was 30 Change to singular
million
millions
more in 2004 compared to its original.
Change to singular
million
On the other hand
, although
the percentage presented how often trains in Sydney run on time fluctuated between about 93% and 85% buring
the initial 15 years by 2003, it plummeted in the final year to reach its trough st Correct your spelling
during
apploximately
73%.Correct your spelling
approximately
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