Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. if these are not taught many are at risk of dying out. in your opinion is it important for everyone to study English? should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and if so how?

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Studying
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is very crucial nowadays and maybe above learning our mother language. I think in my opinion it is valuable for all people around the world to study
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during very early childhood.
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of the most popular methods to communicate between people from everywhere is
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language and which
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of
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the languages
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is more famous than
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? It's becoming essential to learn it and
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better
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anything more than children.
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of their small age
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the fast way they memorize the
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which they
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they can learn the original language from
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easily in the house or community they live in so it's easy
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a must learn
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Task Response
The essay needs to be more focused on the prompt and should provide a clear opinion on the importance of studying English and the preservation of local languages.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure and logical flow of ideas. Each paragraph should develop a single main point and be connected coherently to the next.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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