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Better driver education for better driving habits is more effective than heavier punishments for driving offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#driver #education #habits #punishments #offences
Certainly, punishments are more effective ways, in my opinion than education in a good way to make it a habit . Making a person feel his actions is watched and assessed will make him more street and choosing the right thing to do even if they felt it is not the easiest way .
on the other hand
 ,breaking a habit is so easy especially if it is an annoying habit
that is
 not wanted by me and does not make me get faster . example when you have an important coal that you were waiting for it you would answer it even if you have a good education about the rules and how it should not be ignored for your safety and the society, so why
such
 a thing happens ? because he believes that it is only once a time and nobody will notice it so what is the problem ? of curse nothing unless someone is watching and seak for a person to do a mistake
then
 publish
this
 mistake to others and what is more horrible taking money for it ! so yeah
that is
 more workable . but, even all I said making a manner that helps you to be more controllable of your act is helpful so, it is likely that both of them are needed to achieve a place with considered driver as the main idea, is to make people know that careless driveways would make them lose lots of valuable things as money and souls .
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