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Transport delays and long journey times are a widespread phenomenon in many cities today. What are the causes of this problem, and how could the situation be improved?

#transport #delays #journey #times #phenomenon #cities #situation
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 that are widespread in cities and it is an important subject
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 concern for all.
Long hour
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 delays of transporters or long journey times are one of those. Problems that
cause
this
 vary from outdated infrastructure to overpopulation. I will explain and give Some solutions in
this
 essay. First of all, there are many types of public transport that could
cause
 delays
such
 as old buses and cars, especially in big cities. We can replace them with new ones to reduce the traffic and prevent ruining a day for many people that want to go to school or work.
Secondly
, overpopulation could affect the quality of the amenities too. By
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 we mean using infrastructure over and over again by a huge amount of people may
cause
 many technical problems.
For instance
, many country dwellers daily use old public
transportations
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 to go to their work. Governments should think about some ways to solve
this
 issue. Facilities renovation is an effective way that states could do.
For instance
, checking the vehicle wheels, strings and disc brakes once a month can prevent future difficulties. They can
also
 improve
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 facilities and amenities,
this
 can
cause
 depopulation in big cities and prevent overpopulation.
As a result
, great job opportunities and cheaper social services can encourage individuals to live in the suburbs which can increase the city and country dweller's quality of life. In conclusion, it seems that outdated infrastructure and overcrowding are the
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 factors behind the transport frustration. Possible solutions would be renewing them and controlling the city population.
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