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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides data about how much pollution was generated by three different sources (Transport, Industry, Households) to the
air
 in
UK
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the UK
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 in
fifteen-year
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a fifteen-year
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 period.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is that
Industrial
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the Industrial
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 sector was the greatest pollution source contaminating
UK
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the UK
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 compared to others
in
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throughout the whole-time frame. Another interesting point is that the majority of
output
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 of
air
pollutant
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pollutants
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 became better over
the
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apply
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time. Looking at more details, as regards
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector, the most contribution of
air
pollutant
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pollutants
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 was made by the manufacture at just below 6 million tonnes in 1990.
Then
, it will
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drop significantly over six years and was continuing
decrease
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 until hit the bottom at 2 million by the end of the period.
In addition
, the worst
air
 condition in
UK
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the UK
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was happened
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happened
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 in 1990 which
have
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generated
pollutant
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pollutants
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 at around 7 million tonnes in total. There was a considerable decline in the total of
air
pollutant
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pollutants
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 produced in
UK
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the UK
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during
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for
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 15 years.
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