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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opininon.

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Today’s world
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 has found diverse ways to provide alternatives
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 traditional
education
, online
education
, is probably the most popular one. Several institutions of great renown have opted to give various courses and seminars using online platforms.
While
 other institutions opt to maintain the traditional methods for every course they offer, no matter the
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.
Both
 methods have clear advantages and disadvantages, the main one for online
education
 is probably its simplicity. Online
education
 allows
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people to take a class or course from any point on which they can access a wifi connection.
Thus
, solving many issues which prevent people from taking important classes or courses at their respective institutions, mainly transportation, and
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simply allows a more accessible environment for
both
 teachers and students.
However
,
this
also
 poses a dilemma, for there are those who argue that people who take online courses and classes don’t pay as much attention as possible,
due to
 having many distractors at home. They argue that online
education
 doesn’t allow for students to fully immerse in their lectures, making it way more difficult for them to pay attention and properly learn everything they have to, and
also
 makes it harder for teachers to captivate their students and capture their attention. To finalise,
both
 sides have valid points, and as we progress and integrate technology
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 our
education
, I'm sure we'll be able to find a way to balance
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