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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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The recent pandemic changed the way people live their life nowadays, and
children
 are no exception in
this
 case. Smartphone usage among
children
 uptick in the
last
 few years mostly spending their
time
 on online
activities
such
 as online tuition, online extra-curricular
activities
such
 as music
classes
, painting
classes
, social media, games, etc. I think
this
 is a positive development for the
children
.
Children
 are attending their school
classes
 online
while
 getting trained on some of the
activities
 online that they like the most
such
 as handcrafting, painting, exercise
classes
, yoga
classes
, etc. which helps them to maintain and to develop their physical and mental well-being.
Additionally
, by using social media and online games over
smartphones
, they make new friends
,
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 and keep them social in
this
 new era.
While
 spending an enormous
time
 on
smartphones
, eventually they spend less
time
 in transport, resulting in quality
time
 with the family and on household chores, making them a responsible family member. Excessive use of
smartphones
 online can lead to negative development as well. Social media and online games have a positive impact until used moderately, or else these
activities
 can be easily diverted as distractions. Parents should guide their
children
 by advising them
,
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 and keeping
children
 informed about the positive and negative influence
smartphones
 can make on their life. In conclusion, smartphone usage
on
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children
 has more positive development with the help of their parents, by fueling
children
’s energies in the right direction online, and by using parental-control features as needed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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