The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The bar chart compares the amount of money spent on various consumer products in the
UK
and
France
in 2010.
It is clear that
the proportion of spending on cars was noticeably high in both countries over the year given
,
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while
spending on perfumes was the lowest among all.
Also
, French residents spent a larger amount of their budgets on computers than British people.
To begin
with, 450,000
pounds
of
UK
residents’ budget went on cars,
while
the equivalent figure for French people was just 400,000
pounds
.
Moreover
, spending on books in the
UK
and
France
was 400000
pounds
and 300000
pounds
, respectively. In the
UK
, expenditure on cameras, with over 350000
pounds
, was over double that of
France
which was only 150,000
pounds
.
On the other hand
, the amount of money spent on the remaining products was far higher in
France
. In 2010, expenditure on computers in
France
overtook the other country, with a difference of almost 200,000
pounds
.
Similarly
, the figure for perfume goods in
France
accounted for 200000
pounds
of French residents’ budget,
while
the expenditure on
this
in the
UK
was lower, about less than 150,000
pounds
.
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  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
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  • determine
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