The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The bar chart compares the amount of money spent on various consumer products in the
UK
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and
France
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in 2010.
It is clear that
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the proportion of spending on cars was noticeably high in both countries over the year given
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while
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spending on perfumes was the lowest among all.
Also
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, French residents spent a larger amount of their budgets on computers than British people.
To begin
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with, 450,000
pounds
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of
UK
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residents’ budget went on cars,
while
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the equivalent figure for French people was just 400,000
pounds
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.
Moreover
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, spending on books in the
UK
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and
France
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was 400000
pounds
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and 300000
pounds
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, respectively. In the
UK
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, expenditure on cameras, with over 350000
pounds
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, was over double that of
France
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which was only 150,000
pounds
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.
On the other hand
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, the amount of money spent on the remaining products was far higher in
France
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. In 2010, expenditure on computers in
France
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overtook the other country, with a difference of almost 200,000
pounds
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.
Similarly
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, the figure for perfume goods in
France
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accounted for 200000
pounds
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of French residents’ budget,
while
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the expenditure on
this
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in the
UK
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was lower, about less than 150,000
pounds
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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