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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time. You should write at least 150 words.

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The graphs elucidate the layout of the ground floor of a dwelling in various usages between 1958 and nowadays. The space has been used as an office, apartment, and flower shop for different periods of time. Whilst the number of rooms indicated a decrease over time, there are facilities that remained unchanged the whole time. During 1958 and 1984, the space is in used as an office which
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 into 7 areas , including three offices for the manager, secretaries and assistants respectively,
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 it, one meeting room, a
toiled
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 and the reception area near the entrance. The space experienced a renovation between 1985 and 2000
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 and was transformed into a two
bedroomss
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bedroom
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 apartment,
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 and kitchen remained the same, only the toilet was extended and used as a bathroom and shower. In 2001, the ground floor was changed into a flower shop, leaving only three main areas, including the play areas where the bathroom used to be, the gift cards zone, and the office on the right-hand side.
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