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People often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their lives. Why do you think this is? What measure can you suggest to make it easier?

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People
 often have a hard
time
 coping with new
situations
 that happened in their life as they have been used to what they currently have. In my perspective,
this
 happens because we are too familiar with the old
situations
. In order to deal with new circumstances,
people
 will have to be prepared and ready to face it. As humans, we all have emotions and feelings. We are most comfortable around the ones and the environment that we have been
with
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 for a long
time
. After the new situation happened, we would feel empty and it would take quite a long
time
 for us to be adapted to the new environment. For
instant
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, my friends who went to study aboard all find it hard to adapt to the whole new culture,
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 new friends and it all took them quite a long
time
 to fit in. One of the best measures that could help us to cope with
then
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 new
situations
 easier is facing
it
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them
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. Some
people
 often
choose
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 hide their feelings, avoid facing the real situation and keep themselves busy but these are not the best solutions and it would help us feel any better in the long term. Since
,
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 facing
the
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new
situations
 needs bravery but it
also
 gives you
confident
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.
Confident
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 gives
people
 the
strengths
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strength
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 to view the situation in a more positive way and faith that will enable them to move on easier. Another solution is
be
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prepare
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. Life is an unexpected journey, anything might occur not in the way that
people
 want but they have to be ready for it mentally and physically. In
this
 way, they will find it easier to deal with when anything comes by.
For example
,
people
 living in the central regions of Vietnam usually have to deal with terrible weather
phenomenons
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 every year but as they have prepared and know what will happen so the damages are very limited.
Overall
, it is natural that
people
 would have a hard
time
to deal
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 with new
situations
 in their lives but there are ways that can help them to cope with those things easier.
People
 would need to be prepared and directly face the
situations
.
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